Forest Hunt

This is an example of my writing from term two. It is a narrative. We have been focusing on narratives and language in class. I enjoyed writing it because I enjoy writing narratives. Thanks for reading my work, I would like your feedback.

                                           forest hunt                       bobbajohn:shy

                                                                                    and crazy and                  

                                                                                    loves food

                       

                                                                                   Jane:not shy

                                                                                    and very

                                                                                   convincing

0100 hours

Homin city

“Run faster Jane!” said Bobbajohn he and Jane are searching for their dad all over town.Waking up all the people all cozy in bed trying to get some sleep was the noises of Bobbajohn and Jane shouting “DAD! where are you?”. One old man stood up and shouted at the top of his lungs “Shut up you homeless children” “it's 1 o'clock in the morning!” .They were scared so they ran into the forest without clothes. All that stood before them was hungry wolves and hyperthermia.

0300 hours

Homin forest

Bobbajohn and Jane find footsteps and matches.They know their dad smokes and his shoes look like the footprints on the ground.Jane looks around and Bobbajohn can hear wolves surrounding them both.Bobbajohn poops himself and Jane says “snap out of it BobbaJohn” which made him very angry and lose his temper.Jane reacts the same way as Bobbajohn and attacked the wolves. All you could see is their hands covered in blood and a whole new side to Bobbajohn.Their only way to survive is to cook and eat the wolves.

0400 hours  

Homin Point [in the forest]

Further in the forest Bobbajohn and Jane are cold and full of food.More footprints appear and they follow them to a house where they find a lady and a man in the shadows.It was their dad! Bobbajohn and Jane ran up to him and hug him.But one question bothers them,is that lady their mother?But the twins were soo happy.

                           the end